My Sadness is a Cloak (of Lead)

Describing depression ...

my sadness is a cloak of lead

please don't say it's "in my head"
for this is where i live and die
(and so do you)

my sadness swells
in surging waves
great crushing crests of blues
and greys
i try to hide the ugly truth
it wears me out
(and so do you)

this cloak of lead
is hard to bear
emotions drain
(i just don't care)

i think too much
and feel too little
devoured by a psychic pain
my very essence being riddled
wormholes have re-shaped my brain
(i'll never be carefree again)

i live my life
within this head
walking...breathing...
feeling...
dead

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I have no words.....my voice is in my awe!! Solemn, and profound with a splendid musicality to boot! Well done!

[felioness]

Wow...I am honored by your review. Thanks so much!

[Trace]

I love the rhyme patterns and the poem in whole.

very nice

Trace

[felioness]

thanks so much!

[Tiffany Marie Valentine]

I can relate to this poem. Great job!

[felioness]

Thanks! You have had to be there to really get this.

[TheLostMind]

This is exquisite. Your poem seems kinda arrogant in a good, likable way (especially the lines in the brackets). And the last stanza explains the feeling of depression perfectly.. But remember, there is always hope, there is always light at the end of the tunnel.

A very good write.!

[felioness]

Thank you! I know that there is hope. Thanks for the read!

[Pete]

I can feel the heaviness and weight. "devoured by a psychic pain". Nice job.

[felioness]

thank you!