with you

chapter 3

with you, i never feel blue
with you, i"ll always be true
with you, everything seems new
with you, there's nothing i can't do.

with you, i smile...
with you, i cry...
with you, i sing...
wtih you, i live.

with you, i stare...
with you, i dare...
with you, i care...
with you, i share.

with you, i laugh...
and most importantly
with you...
I LOVE.

Reviews

[The Tea Party Mouse.]

Simple, but sweet. Emotions do not have to be complicated.

[Theresa]

Short but sweet and right to the point. It encompasses what love really does to a person. Nicley done.

[Cassandra D.]

this was very beautiful.
I loved the ending :)

[Jenny Nelson]

Like the way "with you" is repeated. Drives the point home that you've found the person you believe is your "soul mate."

[Gabriella]

I'm not quite as fond of this one because I don't really like the rhyme scheme. I feel like it could possibly have been in the way of what you really wanted to say. But I do agree that what you say is important to be shared between lovers.

[mystic soul]

nice rhythm in this little poem!!

[Jibey]

simple sequence of lovers' thoughts... trails down the page like kisses

[fhamie]

@topsyturvy>>> thank you for the nice review...i've edited the second line..you are right i've missed some words there. thanks again..

[topsyturvy]

"with you, i always true"--that's the only line that i saw that was missing a word xD but disregarding that, this poem is perfect. Sincere all through-out and very beautifully written :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Such excellent movement in this poem. A fun poem to read out loud. Kind and sweet words led to a perfect ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote