The half-opened heart

-Bella Moon

 

That vague shadow of you still appears.

The door is half open, darkening any light that bleeds in.

If your silhouette wasn’t just a dream,

I would shut the door on any promise.

But that door is real.

The light; the shadow, true.

One day, you will walk right through,

And finally meet me, on the other side

Of your heart.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

I really like this piece. it's simple, and yet loaded with lots of emotion and power.

"That vague shadow of you still appears.
The door is half open, darkening any light that bleeds in."

that's a really great image - that first line is definitely great. it could be an entire thought in itself.

"If your silhouette wasn't just a dream,
I would shut the door on any promise."

that hope- that saying "if only" then i would give up, but i can't

"One day, you will walk right through,
And finally meet me, on the other side
Of your heart."

aww... that is really sweet. the other side of your heart - i love how you broke up that line, and i loved the idea of it...
:)

hugs

[Serendipity]

How beautifully painful.

I remember that feeling, wishing "I would shut the door on any promise." But it is not easy to do, because you hope and pray that ...

'One day, you will walk right through,
And finally meet me, on the other side
Of your heart."

But the reality is that when that day comes, its too late. Your heart holds on to a memory of yesterday, and what tomorrow brings is not what your heart loves.

[EvesDaughter]

This poem is wonderful. There is
a feeling of hope in the words,
and of course, love. I enjoyed
this very much.

[Hold Fast Hope]

There's so much emotion put in this. I like this one a lot.