Shrapnel

I think this is the second classic haiku I've ever written... I thought it turned out pretty neat.

 

B-52, babe

You got bombed in the worst way

Walk on home, soldier.

Author's Note

I know it says "got" instead of "were," but I figured it fit the style more. That's all I wanted to say.

Reviews

[Legion]

Ah, I can hear the screaming of the shells now. A very interesting write. Never would have equated it with a haiku. Bravo.

[Illegitimate Artist]

A BIG emotion was just captured in 17 syllables. I can't seem to put into words how much I enjoyed this piece. Great work!!

[Boonrassi]

what the heck r u talking about..
got is perfect.
were would blow.... alot.
thats some sick haiku, i absolutely loved it.
im stiiiiiill loving it.
bravo.
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