ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

I’ve brought you to this diamond shore,
To show you how much I adore
My precious time with you,
Amidst the eternal blue,

Your captivating scent adorns the air,
Aromatic, exotic, seductive, rare,
It draws me into your loving heart,
Knowing we will never part,

Come; let’s run hand in hand,
Let our feet grace the sand,
Moments like these I won’t forget,
Most beautiful woman I ever met,

Keep on; we’ve yet to reach the scene,
My divine flower, my fair queen,
I give you this ring to love and cherish,
From today until the day we perish.

Author's Note

How I envision the proposal to my future one-and-only...

Awarded 2nd place in the following contest,
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Poetry-of-Color/11673/

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The title of your poem is perfect as it evokes the feeling of eternity, the forever after, and evermore. The way you introducted the poem with "diamond shore" and ended it with "this ring to love" is a nice way to come full circle with the poem and the reason behind its creation. It's a proposal that I'm sure would be irresistible.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[Tate Morgan]

very nice

[Daniel Gardner]

Thanks for the poem I have added it to the book.

[OkieWonKenokie]

Beautiful.

[Liza]

romantic and heart felt
beautiful

[Cassiopia Summers]

How you describe 'the shore' with diamond shows that you love this woman, because a diamond is supposed to represent the love and promise to your one and only, is it not? But all too often in these times people break this promise.

Great write, I enjoyed it. (:

[Jeffrey Gershom]

I like the scene of this poem. The use of the beach with its "diamond" sand. The two of you sharing one of the most intimate times of your new life together on a beautiful beach. Then embarking on that life long journey as one, on that big blue ocean...that Eternal Blue.
I like this poem very much. Good luck when that day comes, because you'll have much more special times to write of.

[lyssilou]

I love, love, love this poem you really captivate the meaninig of love and that of one caring for one

[Cherrie]

very graceful deliery of such a personal moment. It has a easy flow and rhyme.
Cherrie

[Awdures]

I adored your use of couplets to accentuate the dreamyness of this poem. IT sounds like the perfect meeting and union of two souls. Gentle yet persuasive like the call of the heart. Lol, I don't want to go back to work now...:)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Quite a wonderful proposal and I wish for you this bliss............