ONE NIGHT

ONE NIGHT

One look of your eyes,
transforms my virtue
into a nymphomaniac.

One touch from you,
compels my skin to
stand up and applaud.

One kiss from you,
breathes sex into me,
making me rise.

One night with you,
baptizes me in sin,
resurrecting me unto God.

Author's Note

Reviews

[writing mojo]

Great flow to this poem, "applauding skin" is a very good image to suggest from thoughts, like goose bumps and lumps in the back of the throat, I have been the foresight of this poem many times before..this poem wears a cloak all the way to the last line...lol after a night vision like that i don't know if god would be the right entity to see. good stuff

[ShaneBerry]

it was great but could have had bore meat on its bones (it was alittle short) but very nice rite

[Crowley]

The brevity adds to the sensuality as anything worth having that intently is going to be short in duration. The last stanza is so good and the steaminess of the whole pieces is wonderful. Damn...if you were a woman i'd.......ok just kidding...Nice work mate.

[melissa]

i like it:) no i didnt think it was to short.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

I like it. The act that seems so dirty is so tempting but it is definitely right. Every word in this seems like a comparison and a contradiction, like all is at peace.. Its a lovely intensity, like sex. Awesome!

[c.m.]

Oh....my....gosh!!! Not too short, yeah, mature only I suppose. But wonderful. I love the way you worded it. It's not in your face mature, it's worded in quite a lovely way. Perfect. I love it.

[OkieWonKenokie]

Lovely! Although, I think it'd be nice if was a bit longer but that's my opinion. It still tells a story even though it is quite short. :D

[Robin]

I like the concept of the last stanza , that we must sin before being resurrected before God , a question of the value of values ...