BORN IN YOUR BREATH

BORN IN YOUR BREATH

I see you.

Delicate curves of your
wanton smile part
to reveal the insatiable
dance of your tongue.

I pull you closer.

Your breath ascending
from the heart, dripping
honey, unclothing a bite
of lustful craving.

I embrace you.

My mouth seizing yours
with the moist of my lips,
burning back the fire
inside of you.

I taste you.

My tongue unfolds into
a song upon touching yours,
quenching my thirst
with your love.

I adore you.

Reborn in the breath
that lingers upon
your lips beneath
passionate eyes.

Author's Note

Awarded 2nd in the following contest:
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/So-you-got-what-it-takes%3F/12510/

Thank you for feedback should you leave it :)

Reviews

[Inkcognito]

The title is to die for - simply sublime!
I love the way you start this poem - "I see you" - such a beautiful, simple introduction but, you 'see' deeper, you want more ...I love how feelings, sensations, emotions follow, dressed in lust, sultry passion and tender sensuality...thoughts, like a trickle of honey poured onto smooth, warm skin, slowly making its way, leaving a lingering, sweet trail. (ohhhhhh...I could sooooo do with a kiss like that right now!!) Tantalizing, vivid imagery....YES! a super fabulous write!

[Undying Glory]

yep sure was passionate and sensual work, and i have to agree this is one of your best. absolutely brilliant work man

[TAO]

Nicely worded, sir. Great flow, great imagery, all around pretty damn good. Sensual, to say the very least. If we could see what your'e seeing.

[MuSe Ampoule]

whew!!! This is damned sexy....Hhhhhotttt! Gettin' shivers. Great work here...definitely feel the passion!!!!

[Robin]

very sensual ~

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sign..what a delicious tantalizing sensual write..passion passes through your pen!

[c.m.]

Oh. My. God Ivan! This is truly amazing, and just became my favorite piece of yours. The images it plants in the mind are so vivid. The words are delciate and lovely. This is just beautiful. Bravo.