To My Addiction From Hell

Another knife in my hand

This life only lasts so long

Just three more years till another day

God i miss you so

That needle stabbed in your arm

Sent the drug threw your viens

If only i was there to stop you

But never again

I wont leave you

I'll take this knife to my heart

As my corpse has already started deteriorating

The night we last said good-bye

Your kiss was my high

And now my withdrawls are getting worse

And now that your gone

i wonder what went wrong

This suicide note is addressed to hell

I hope you get it somehow

Just so I can tell you I love you one last time

Before the reaper arrives to take me away

There's no use fighting it

Soon we'll be together again

Bodies ajoined in a cobweb of fire

That we were never really able to avoid

And as i lay me down to sleep

It is you that i forever want to keep

Reviews

[CLCurrie]

I enjoy it a little to much.

[Scott W. Martin]

Very dark. There's a lot in this poem which draws personal feelings and thoughts which, although I'm sure not everyone can relate to, I feel like I do. In essence, that is poetry to me, and I like it. My only thoughts to improve this piece would be to add spaces in between thoughts; but then again, its the artist that creates great works, not the reviewer. I enjoyed it.

[Katherine Wyatt]

Very dark, can feel your pain..nice flow..good write..

[octane143]

Wow! What a hauntingly dark piece! The raw emotion is very evident and you did a great job of accurately describing addiction. Some very great descriptions here. I can sense the pain, the guilt and the sort of acceptance. Dark but beautiful, nicely done.

[Shane Brooks]

not bad a couple of nice lines in there.."this suicide note is addressed to hell I hope you get it some how" good stuff kind of a dark piece but then thats what words are for ..a couple lines had some metaphor I couldn't quite grasp..."bodies joined in a cobweb of fire we were never really able to avoid"..I had a hard time wrappin my head around that one nice piece though I'll have to read some more of your work