Clumsy

So easy to get lost

in beauty.  His

eyes glint briefly.  The soft lids

below his eyes seem

to contain infinity.

He just sits there

curled in a blanket, innocently

bearing this gift.  So innocent

that he speaks and drops it.

Reviews

[Awdures]

I liked the simplicity of the story here. What I don't understand is why it's written in a staggered fashion. I think what your aiming for is a childs' thought process. So short sentences and then a movement to another short sentence? Very gentle feel to the words and rhythm here.