A dead hedgehog in October

Ease my pain, he says
but don't let my blood drop on the end of this page
I have given you false letters to a true name
It is not my fault that only the bad things remain

Oh, it hurts this heart of mine
Darling, I know you can forgive me this time
Let us have a drink, let us have some wine
You will see, you will see
everything will be fine

By the way
do you know how they call a dead hedgehog in October ?
I don't know,Jeff,she says
But I think it's over

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Quite a moving poem there. Your break-up has been pictured well and your rhyming adds to your poetry.
You look to settle things down, but do girls ever give boys a chance to do so? Your tone is not sad, but is amusing and engaging- not that sad poems are not engaging.
good work. Keep writing.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you very much, I'll keep on writing! Thank you for your encouraging words!

[alanwgraham]

This is a very bittersweet tale and told very well. There is a bit of mystery about it which is good and I really like some of the images eg 'false letters to a true name' The idea of the dead hedgehog pulls it together very well.
Well done!
Alan

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, Alan. 'false letters to a true name' is one of my favorites

[isus]

very good piece of writting, really has thick atmosphere.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you, I appreciate it!

[Woody]

original way to talk about a break up. and I like that. I like it when the writer goes off the beaten track.
this makes it look like no other. well done.
great title. attention-grabber.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Oh thank you very much for your nice words,Woody!:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sad situation depicted..i like the way you present this, in much the robert creeley style, as he did several conversational poems like this...

nicely done.

j.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you for your nice words! I don't Robert Creeley..I think I have to read some of his writings..
Best regards,
Thomas