Synthetic Bliss

Nauseous from the sight of you

and cautious while I'm next to you-

I try to tweak my view of our melodramatic situations~

which leaves the taste of stimulation that we are so familiar of

we make believe our false love is real

while synthetic bliss enhances the way we feel~

I want to be away from you

my damaged mind needs time to heal

I have no intentions of hurting you 

but this is something I really must do

I will sneak away when you're not looking

I'll leave you alone with your synthetic bliss 

Reviews

[Ashley Griffiths]

I really like the wording and imagery that you use throughout this piece. I just have one suggestion regarding the last line, I feel that by using the word feelings, as the last word, disrupts the flow of the piece. You could try 'I will leave you alone deep within your synthetic bliss' or try removing the the plural 's'. I hope this is helpful.

[audrie]

Thanks Ashley - if you don't mind I will take your suggestion

[Ashley Griffiths]

Feel free, happy to help! :-)