Another for you

i cannot think,
of what to say,
to tell you why,
i feel this way.
i cannot begin,
to understand,
the way I feel,
holding Your hand.
i cannot find,
the words to say,
to tell You how amazing,
You made this day.
i cannot imagine,
a greater bliss,
then that i feel,
within Your kiss.
i cannot tell you,
because you see,
it shows on my heart,
and my words to Thee.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

This is a sweet poem. It's got a lot of "cute" material.... yeah, that's the word, I think it's cute. ^^ lol It has those types of thoughts that any guy in puppy love has. lmao.

My only criticism would be the final verse where you used the word "Thee". Just stick to modern day language in a modern day poem. ;) With this poem, I don't think it needs to rhyme, or else it sounds too forced. :)

Regardless, this really is a neat poem. ^^ Great job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Phoenix]

Yes! I've figured out what I want to say about this poem finally - Though it may not be the best poem you've written, it looks like you were feeling this way and it just fell right out of your head, which is what makes it good. When you read it, it's like it all comes out in one breath, which makes you feel what the poem is saying, which is what makes excellent writing! Good work!