the last of her

hindered only by psychological creatures
and an annoying conscience with a bad attitude
she watched the rocks crumble around her feet
with something like bemusement and a
drug-addled smile upon her translucent face.

she knew, were she in a lesser state of mind
that she might just be tempted
to traverse the invisible bridge
which lay before her bedazzled stiletto-clad feet
into the great perhaps.



though.  upon reconsidering,
she doubted that she'd been in much lesser
a mental state than quite recently
and she felt as if her feet wanted to slip anyway.

my god, were those shoes expensive.

Reviews

[ShameemAkhtar]

hahahaha.... :)

You had me thinking of a lot of obscure things but you wrap it up in an excellent twist of dark humour...

'though. upon reconsidering,
she doubted that she'd been in much lesser
a mental state than quite recently
and she felt as if her feet wanted to slip anyway.

my god, were those shoes expensive.'

Genius!

[Elaenor Aisling]

Great write. Love the last line. :)

[Nobody.]

:) All that pondering and wondering, and it all comes back to shoe prices! LOL!

You have an amazing and original humour to help convey your genius.

:)

This is MMM MMM Good!

[Cocoacandy]

WHY NO RHYTHM??? (is that right?) Doesnt matter. I am beside myself with confused emotions... why do you never use rhythm??? lol. Very good otherwise dear, props to you! *claps for you*

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a very good poem, well observed, really like the first verse, a neat attack upon the intellectual poverty and stupidty of taking drugs, and a great running metaphor of shoes, feet and bridge, fine poem.

[MOON]

This is clever, funny and original.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

This was very surrealistic to me, with a dash of comedy thrown right in, a combination I don't get to see enough of on here.

[paul]

'great perhaps' -fantastic poetry
i like the twist of the last line too.