Us

Time has never a time 

feelings have not a feeling

 hands have a warmth 

 warmth to the touch

 feeling I need , I need so much

Twisted my heart 

 why cant I see

hurt is nothing 

unless you can feel

time is worthless, as the end it draws

as then is now 

eternally yours

Reviews

[penchantpoet]

Hello Freeman - as this is your second poem I'm criting - I can see I'm going to like your work a lot. Again I mention that you would do well to punctuate your work. If you like to keep that aspect a little less formal - try using Capitals at the begining of certain sentences. Intersperse them for more effect. Nice concepts - like where you're going from with some of this stuff!
Keep it up!
PP

[Crinkle°]

wow I love this way I could write it!

[dangerbooze]

It's very short, and there could be more added. But when it's so direct, more length would be nice, but it's not quite needed.