WHO AM I? (part 3)

She asked to be understood,he was there

 

 

 

"Knock knock"

She thought to her self

“Opening for a stranger!!

Why?

Oh but he is not!

In a minor time, I, easily felt his words

Plus I was caught by his charm”

 

“Do you have my inside key?

She asked, with humble eyes

“I will search for it even in  deep seas”

He replied

 

“I am hard to be known “

He was told

 

“I know, I know

but if I only looked at you

I ll  work to know more”

That was his talk

 

Finally, she sat

Giving her body a rest

 

 

“What a decision to make!!!”

Thinking to herself one more time

Asking how and why?

Considering facts in her life

Remembering her passing days

“Days Before him, were the same

Fun, hardly had a place

Will he make the change?

Will I let this wind go in vain?”

 

Close to her, he approached

Staring at her

Trying to read her thoughts

 

   Eventually…..

A slight smile was shown

Coming from her hoping heart

Giving welcome to THE visitor on board”

 

Receiving the sign

He, joyfully, opened his arms

Thinking how careful he will be

So he doesn’t abuse her reply

 

 

 

Reviews

[~Lizzy♬]

Reminds me of my newest poem I just wrote, "Key". Great write, loved it!

~Lizzard~

[Libby]

[hi=he?]
[i=I]
[I ll-I'll ]
[hardily-hardly]
[a visistor?]
[careful]
I guess I'm proof reading n.n

[Magdelena]

Ahhhh, now I see. Yes... Knock Knock, who's there? It is I, has always been, I!

Wonderful message and each piece proved to be what I thought it would be. Leading up to the one you so needed all along, yet somehow, for some reason, never got the chance to let her know exactly what you really felt.

Interesting what we all see once looking upon a piece. Where one see's mistakes, I see emotion, dreams, and longing..


Beautifully done.

Knock Knock...
Mags xx

[Sunni Davis]

I enjoyed reading all three of these. Your concept is wonderful and the images youve created are beautiful. I can also see your writing improve with each piece, Keep up the good work!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I see where the 'knock knock' was going. Knocking on the door of her heart, asking to be let in. Good idea for the ongoing poem.
You have left out one very important thing the apostrophe in I'll..
Being this is a serious poem I would use you in place of U..
But this is your poem ... so you write it as you like.. but you do need that apostrophe... i enjoyed these three poems of finding love.

Chloe

[Stef Outsiders]

I can actually see this in my head... getting better....