IF IT WASN T FOR YOU

Is it love?

 

 

 

Breaking doors of loneliness

Crushing walls of sadness

Crossing roads of bitterness

Until I reach to imagine your face s sweetness

With no snide remarks

Nor with false friends in front,,

with your thought at head

i rest

 settled and calm

 

The inner strengths begins to come

As I find  missing Me , the one 

who might have been lost 

                                    If you hadn t been once around 

Author's Note

Yeah ...the inside thinking, without it its hard to carry on

Reviews

[That_Girl]

You can barely tell English isn't your first language... apart from a few punctuation mishaps, this is pretty spot on. Well done. I enjoyed it thoroughly.

[dunnia]

wow this is a really nice poem you really are talented

[The Random Writings Of ..]

Well with English not being your first language, this is a great piece. The piece has a sad underlying tone, I feel a longing within the piece. Great write, Thank you for sharing.
Kates

[Yuki Thoj]

It was really nice. Your English here and there is a bit messy but I think the more you write, you will progress and improve on your writing along with your English.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

One of your bests .. it is lovely.. sad and melancholy .

Chloe

[francineeexx]

I don't really know much about poems, I don't even know what type this. But its really nice :). It flows and, its like I can feel the emotion. Really good :)

[pumpkin head]

I really enjoyed this write, i can feel sincereity within the words.
Powerful read.

[Muse]

Good title...lovely in presentation.

With no snide remarks
Nor with false friends in front,,
with your thought at head
i rest
settled and calm

Sometimes I think "we do" hide behind friends to save face. We often try to break through walls to rise above personal frustrations.

[Katy Stash]

Wow it's.....:) Majestic

[Olivia Marie]

It's absolutely beautiful! :) I like how you capitalized the first letter of "Me" in the 11th line, third stanza. It added emphasis to it. :) I like how you grouped things, and the font was perfect for this poem. There's only one problem, and that's with the 4th line, first stanza. "Until I reach to imagine your face s sweetness" is written in a way making it hard to understand. It may be do to typos, but I would try to fix that. However since I have read a bunch of your work, I understand what you were trying to say. The whole thing was very lovely and I enjoyed reading it :) Absolutely beautiful. Oh, and one last thing. I loved how you put "I rest" in it's own line. Which added a calming effect to it :)