Rain on Different Roofs

A late-night after thought on how I'd see my life at if I was born under different circumstances.

Rain pours, dripping, dropping
The chill seeps through your skin
Winds blow, unending not stopping
It howls, a whistling melodic hymn

Pouring water, droplets splatter
Muffled by the walls of your home
Comfy beds, warm covers
Surely thankful, this, you've known?

People outside, ridden by cold
Truly star-crossed lives
Nothing to eat, such hungry souls
An existence we'd revise

If tides turn, we fill their shoes
Will we begin to know?
To understand? To symphatize?
Hardships of those below

Rain pours, dripping, dropping
The chill seeps through your skin
Winds blow, unending not stopping
It howls, a whistling melodic hymn

Author's Note

I need criticism. Harsh or mellow, I welcome it. Haha harshmellow criticism!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

"Harshmellow" might be the most clever thing I've seen in days! I love made up words & this is very clever! You should write a poem using that concept about life in general.

Now about your poem. You are very good at showing life thru metaphor. I love how your metaphoric poems are mostly about describing sensations from some natural scene while tossing in an occasional philosophical thought to give us a hint that your poem is about more than just the physical manifestations you describe, as if guiding the reader to ponder more deeply, yet not spelling it out for us. I don't like philosophical poems where the poet drones on & on about their way of seeing life, as if they are trying to convince us to see it their way. This has a much lighter touch, just giving the reader a jumping-off point to delve into their own way of seeing it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

A horse lifts his hoof, but keeps his other hooves down.
One house has a roof, but several houses have roofs.
The English language is weird like that! *wink! wink!*

[Lox]

Everytime I see your reviews its sure to make me smile, I was just writing ''harsh or mellow'' its just that when I read it back I hear marshmellows and got kinda hungry haha.

Barley girl you know how to encourage any aspiring writer's soul to the core! Thank you so much for the compassionate reviews! Hoping to return the favor.

P. S. Funny thing bout me putting in rooves, i google searched what rooves are and it shows its the plural form of roof so I went with it. Now I tried google searching ''plural of roof'' and it shows that rooves is an old secondary plural form and that its an incorrect plural form. Huh. I know something new now thank you