Stolen

One may never know the damage of words spoken to the young.

 

Words...like wicked wind

Breathed away hopes and dreams

 

Like smoke in the breeze

Leaves from the trees

Drifting away

 

Like chimney's smoke

Floating into nothingness

Vanishing

 

Leaving a void

Emptiness

 

And in the emptiness

Fear

Lonliness

Hopelessness

 

Whirled away by wicked winds

Reviews

[Dani]

You've captured some powerful images here - I especially enjoy the last few lines: "Fear, Lonliness, Hopelessness, Whirled away by wicked winds." Though I sometimes don't really believe in "nothing" (even though perception isn't necessarily reality, blahblah), it's an interesting idea to ponder.

Back to the point, though. I think that many of us are more vulnerable to words than any physical beating. It's a shame they're so easy to lose control of. Fantastic write.

[MuSe Ampoule]

a flurious fury of words, how you show the power of your pen. brilliant work Gloria...always!

[Ruth]

So true! The young have never been more pressured to hear what is indoctrinated upon them! Awesome poem xx

[Art Sun]

a nicely penned work...

[OT]

very nice!! a great use of assonance in places just lets it flow so easy! and content-wise it's very solid! You raise a lot of relevant points!!

[MiidniightSoul]

It's a very beautiful poem. Touching and heartfelt. Emotional and powerful. Very well written with a nice flow. It's an excellent piece.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

WOW! this was so excellently written, the imagery was brilliant! Great Write!

beautiful poem! loved it, especially towards the end :)

[Holly O'Brien]

I like this one....simplistic but deep in thought...very profound♥

[cfix]

Wow this is amazing, Powerful too.
I really enjoyed this piece.
Like the pic used as well.

[writernubbin]

so true and heartfelt. I like the words you have chosen to emphasize the hurt in a child's heart. the imagery is stark and right to the point. well done.