Illusion

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Morning illusion

Between sleep and wakefulness

Unreal melody

Song of the night now departs

Leaving dawn of confusion

Author's Note

A simple tanka

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

Lots of feel for a short form. I think the moment when we hover in confusion between sleep, and wakefulness, is one of the mot revealing times of our lives. I think it is a few precious moments, when perhaps our conscious self can truly comprehend our subconscious. It is at this time that the "real" world can most deeply feel like an "illusion". Lots of meat in this short write. Disciplined and well thought out.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

=D Nicely done, you describe that moment between times very well.

[OT]

another one I've read somewhere haha but a new look = new review!

an ethereal dance into the subconscious here! plays between the illusions of morning and those darned melodious nights creating a dawn of confusion in the twilight zone!! nice!

[Art Sun]

nice work G...I know I haven't been by in awhile huh...your work is still solid...we all have felt that awakenning when we are still reaching to hold on to those dreams...

nice....

[Lilly Negoi]

excellent description of that state of morning dizziness :). and very well written tanka!

[Norma M Sutton]

I like it. What are the rules for a tanka?