Daughter's Cry

Coffee and honey
and a daughter's cry,

these are things that make
life so superfly,

a bit of leisure
and a round of prose,

a simple rhyme scheme
and now for the close

Reviews

[Muse]

You have a slightly new edition to the family...correct? Yes I remember those early mornings...coffee is a must after a sleepless night...but those cries...are heavenly. :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Yeah, she is 4.5 months old...an awesome bundle of joy. They are heavenly for sure. Thanks for the review, Muse.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Awesome! Brought a huge silly grin to my face as I felt the happiness within you as you wrote this! Love it!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Thanks, Priscilla.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Always a pleasure dear friend!

[Ed Hart]

ta-dah!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Thanks, Ed.

[TLK]

Heh, nice meta-poetry.

I think the fourth line would read better without the 'so'. I think the extra syllable added by it distends that verse a bit.

[Kenneth The Poet]

All the lines are five syllables, which is why the "so" is there.

Thank you for the review.