Our Destiny

Every man fears the bomb
Because of what can go wrong

A slip-up ends our race
Thus ending our disgrace

Life falters on this dot
The place the galaxy forgot

So down we go, down we fall
We tug on the funeral pall

Just because we are that beast
On the fallout, we always feast

We just lie, we have no fear
We just raze everything dear

So down we go, down we fall
It is our destiny after all

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Clear, sharp and to the point, which is articulate and ascerbic. Good write.

[Candy-Top]

Nice. I like how the last line ties the whole poem together. Good meaning.

[vinny ciambriello]

I'd lengthen the lines, which would make the rhymes take their time in hitting the ear. As it is, they come too fast and lose effectiveness.

[Ed Hart]

although the evidence is stacked against us, it may be that any judgment is a rush to judgment...i mean, i can't tell you how many times my judgment fell short of the leap, and i required an absolute certafiable miracle to pull my skinny a*s out of the quick sand...and, as miracles [please forgive the 'religious' accent to some of my asides] seem to be the real currency when it comes to buying us out of the poor house of our mental constructs...anyway, life is long enough for you to change your mind at least six times