Toilet Brush

the poet in question
can't think straight,

can't spell straight,

can't even remember
how a line is formed,

this may explain why
we are a divine comedy
that even Dante would
bow his head in shame,

he didn't write this,

some kind of fucked-up
deity probably did,

or maybe a brutal mother
called nature did,

he's playing Scrabble
in an earthquake zone,

he's become one of the
one-hand clappers who
forgot how to do it,

no wonder people see
blank spots on the map,

no wonder people see
human heads as Swiss cheese,

no wonder bored children comb
their hair with back scratchers,

human life is the toilet brush
scrubbing the universal toilet bowl,

it's a wonder the universe
s**t us out at all,

or maybe not after all

Reviews

[roarke]

I'd leave off the last line, don't second guess yourself when yer on a roll.....or is that role.....

[Hayley]

Haha very intriguing write. I wouldn't say it's dark, and I wouldn't say it's bitter. It's just insight into a writer who is trying to make a point. After all, the majority of writing is getting it all out, yes?
Your descriptions and your metaphors are top-notch:
"no wonder people see
human heads as Swiss cheese,
no wonder bored children comb
their hair with back scratchers,"

I also enjoyed your incorporation of Dante. "He didn't write this"
Love the parallel with the layers of hell and the universe shitting us out. Well, maybe that's why so much s**t hits the fan....
Excellent!

[Chris]

Ken, it isn't dark as much as it feels bitter - to me. I'm not sure of what you are going after with this... prolly just me.

Is he on the flushing toilet? WC? I wonder... I shall pay more attention... what a honest and awesome attitude! :D