Pain at 12:00

This about a person that had found love and it was ripped from her and the pain that follows,

Tears stream down her face, memories of them overflow in her head. All she wants is to forget, she holds on to her teddy bear he bought for her. It is dripping wet with her tears of sorrow and hurt. He always tells her it's not her it's him, but she can't help but think it's somehow her fault. She tries one more time to express how she really feels. She pours out her heart and soul, sadly he is not affected by it. Confusion and hurt consumes her, the pain tears her from the inside out. As each second passes she dies even more. Everything seemed perfect between them. As the clock strikes 12:00am she screams out in agony and passes out from the pain

Author's Note

What do you think of the wording? Would there have been a better way of explaining anything?

Reviews

[nazia]

it s sad but beautiful.. lyrical and flowing... but if its your story dont bind yourself to the anguish. move on

[Ehra Khan]

is this fictional or something you went through Geisha? 'cause its beautiful. I've been through that pain and I totally get it :)