Of Our Forever

Of Our Forever

Dance in the rapture of dawn’s eclipse,

Smile in the morning of the universe,

Roll like thunder across the reflection of my heart,

Walk - lady into the summer of my eyes.

Displace the thorns and brambles from the rose of love,

Open the door and step inside the joys of heaven,

Pause for a moment in the flames of desire,

Whisper a sigh into the evenings of my ears.

Breathe upon my lips of passion,

Sink into the arms of intimate pleasure,

Together we can become the harmony of the rain,

Set free upon the ocean of silence.

Fill my soul with your essence,

Wear me like a jewel in a golden band,

Laugh with the sparkle of the sun as it blossoms,

Bloom into the starlight of our forever…

       2/26/2005

Picture by: Giovanni

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is the poster child for writing a love poem that's original by using a constant array of varying metaphors, all woven together with a similar nature theme. So refreshing to read so many metaphors without a cliché in the bunch! Love your use of dynamic verbs to begin many of your lines, which adds such a beseeching quality to this message. It's pretty rare for me to rave about a love poem, as there are millions posted daily & most sound similar. Here your originality shines! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ghost]

Wow thank you for such kind words .. I know how I feel when I see the person I wrote it for and even though we are apart if I seen her today and spent a small amount of time with her I would feel this way and maybe more... Thank you again,..

[barleygirl]

You are blessed *smile*

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and words. Amazing.
"Dance in the rapture of dawn’s eclipse,
Smile in the morning of the universe,
Roll like thunder across the reflection of my heart,
Walk - lady into the summer of my eyes"
The above lines can stand alone. I liked them. Thank you for sharing the outstanding words and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Ghost]

Thank you... It is nice to see another poets review of my write especially if it is a nice review.. Thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

Please send me read request. I always try to read and you are welcome.

[Enigmatic Amor]

I would agree with another reviewer, your use of metaphors is particularly creative n this piece. Well done.

[Ghost]

Thank you. Again I am lucky to have a muse to bring out the feelings from inside of me..

[Kelly Scheppers]

Love comes from the most unexpected places. ...and usually, when we're not even looking. How wonderful you have the gift of poetry to shower upon her. What woman wouldn't love that?

[Ghost]

Thank you so much.. it does come from unexpected places

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

And ever and ever amen- may it last for eternity- beautiful and precious and waiting to de found- just wonderful🌹

[Ghost]

When we were together we fit so well together, and when apart I long for this person.. Thank you so very much.

[sette]

i like the poem so romantic and sweet rich in metaphors too and the power of love is something else to reckon

[Ghost]

Love can be a driving force in life.. When it is with someone special it is incredible.. Thank you for a nice comment..

[sette]

you are very much welcome, hope you are doing ok?

[Kay]

This is just lovely. The lines flow smoothly and descriptions give this soft, intimate feeling. It's very nicely written!

[Ghost]

Thank you. it is an older poem but it was one I liked alot and your words made it even more special.