Seen too much

I am what I've seen 

I am made nothing  more than skin and bone 

The flesh that was written on my body was never mine to keep 

Hair cut and greased 

I am what I've seen 

I've seen mountains crushed to dust 

Blood on trees 

Broken irises 

Screaming and laughing tears 

I've seen more than these young eyes allow me to express

No longer have I been the person of soft disparities 

I am just tribulations of rough skins

And lost dreams and anger 

I didn't feel lucky 

I didn't feel lonely 

I just felt plain 

I am What I've seen 

Reviews

[CyranoDBergeron]

As far as the mechanics I think this is good but its hard to tell because I fundamentally disagree with your statement.

You 'have' seen is correct.

I don't know what you have or haven't seen. And I can't tell you how to feel about it.

I can only say that you aren't what you've seen.

What you've seen is the object. You are the reference point. Distinct but dependant.

[meepmoom]

Yeah I kinda wrote this one on a half measure because I wanted to be descriptive in what I’ve seen making me the person I am today but I’m still a private person being that personal even wording it in such a way that doesn’t give off too much detail didn’t work in this case. I quite like your comment it gave me a lot to think about. Thank you!

[CyranoDBergeron]

You are very talented.

There was a professor in a concentration camp. He saw a lot.

But instead of allowing it to affect him negatively he became more egalitarian and became a source of inspiration to everyone around.

Many people cited him as the reason they could continue.

The point is that he 'saw' the same as everyone else,
But his true Identity, chose to rise above his experience(what he was seeing)

Otherwise no greatness could be possible. I think you're pretty great however lol

Just don't give your identity away and find yourself posing in front of your ego.

[meepmoom]

In a sense he still was what he saw? Yes my poem is more focused on the negative on the things I’ve seen that have given me my ptsd but I don’t deny the growth and the good that has come out of those experiences, I think my aim here is that experiences that we go through impact us both negatively and positively but it’s anout how we let our emotions effect it on which is it’s for the time being. He rose above what he saw but I’m certain that he still struggled with the negative that he saw. But thank you very much for your insights and you’re pretty great too!

[CyranoDBergeron]

Like I said. I don't care if you choose to be happy or sad. It's not personal.

But ask yourself who it is that makes that choice, and whether the choice makes her superior to the option.

Yes it does.

Words have power, little priestess. That is my ultimate point.

[meepmoom]

Yeah that’s fair. Thanks!