Come close before its too late

I need you to come close to me

Come close to me before its late,

 

Come close to me before I went away,

 

Come close to me before you set me free,

 

Come close to me before I start to fake smile,

 

Come close to me before I m gone,

 

Come close to me because I know our love is not so strong,

 

Come close to me because I want a reason to be yours,

 

Come close to me because I need to be yours,

 

Come close to me because you held me strong,

 

Come close to me because I don't want to be apart,

 

Come close to me because I can't stay away,

 

Come close to me because I love you,

 

Come close to me because what I need is only YOU……My Love

Author's Note

I m new in world of expression. But some how wanted to express myself through my words. Though i know i m not too strong but tried to make it......

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

The feelings, expressions and wants behind the words are nice.
The thing that stands out, as a negative for me, is the repetition
of "Come close to me". Little repetition is fine, but when used
on every line it gives me a sense of a list; and I'm sure that's not
what you want to get across.

Good effort.

[David W Moore III]

It's a very strong pleading. And a universal cry for love, for love returned, for love returned strongly, and for a comfortable, safe zone. Well done
David

[JENY]

In every relationship..
However strong it is…..
There will be a space for insecurity….
In the minds of persons involved in the relationship…..
And we need constant awareness that….our loved ones will be with us forever….
This poem seems to be an outpouring of that need…,
An outstanding creation…..

[Shalini Dinesh]

A good try, you can still work on this, the feelings were put into words, and these words could be rephrased to form a better poetry... Keep writing, i enjoyed reading this.... To participate in the contest, i want you to dedicate it to someone, hope you read the rules of the contest fully.... God luck!

[ForTheWorld]

i love it....

[heich]

ahhh..come closer..somehow i love that word..hmmmn.

[al25]

Great work. Repitition makes your poem all the more effective.

[Ashley]

i like the repatition its very strong and the emotions of the poem are clear. you obviously have a natural tallent if this is one of your first poems.

[Richard Williams]

Keep up the good efforts of honest and heartfelt expression.