my lase

my lase

A Poem by cloakedone

my lase is cold
she had been sold
when was i to be told ?

© 2015 cloakedone


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cloakedone
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Had to look up the word 'lase'. My lase is hot. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago
I know I said I would review your'e stuff, but I haven't sorry about that. However, I like your poem. I'll try to read more of you're stuff.

Posted 10 Years Ago
Nice work... like the rhyming in this one too. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago
At first I found myself counting syllables to see if you had a haiku going, came up five short. Still it doesn't matter. Great transition with as few words as possible. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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 Added on May 7, 2015
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cloakedone

havanna, AR



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so if i told people about me what would i say? i'd say learn me through my writing ........and as you see i love my dog jean:) What other people think of me is none of my buisness sometimes it hu.. more..