night by the sea

I walk the sand as the tide recedes,

leaving broken shells and scattered light.

The horizon burns in violet and gold,

and I trace your steps beside mine,

though I know they’ll fade before dawn.

Your hand brushes mine,

and I feel the weight of quiet moments�"

how much is ours, and how much

the ocean swallows in its hush.

The water pulls at shadows,

pulls at me, pulls at the spaces

between your words and mine.

I lean close, breathe the salt�'cold air,

and wonder if this night

will remember us when we’re gone.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The sea will remember dear Grace. The stars and the moon are observing us and they smile. When love is kind. A wonderful poem. You took me to the sea and good memories.
Coyote

[SkinlessFrank]

There is universality here in the interplay of the relationship and the ocean, and how you move between it and the uncertainty of life. I am reminded that life began in the ocean, and that the oceans can swallow it up again....the pulling of the waters. I appreciate how this reminds me of loves and sunsets gone by.

[Grace Lee]

thanks for the sincer compliment

[Amy R]

Nice poem, it revolves around the transient nature of love and memory, capturing a moment shared between two people by the ocean at night.
I like the language used... Eg. like "broken shells," "scattered light," and "violet and gold" create a rich visuals. The use of tactile imagery, such as "your hand brushes mine," enhances the intimacy of the moment.
-Amy

[Paul Michael Kelly]

I like this one a lot, especially the ending. Beautiful writing....

[Grace Lee]

thanks for stopping by

[Buddhistboy73]

A romantic poem that shines a light on mother nature and her love...

This is so peaceful to read...it lifts the spirit of the reader..
These are my favourite lines:

I walk the sand as the tide recedes,
leaving broken shells and scattered light.
The horizon burns in violet and gold,

A heartfelt and encouraging piece....thanks for sharing..

BB73.

[Michael Sun Bear]

Nicely written Grace. I particularly like the last stanza, a strong finish. Will it remember?……dawn will probably erase the memory of you - so good thing we have your poem, a written record!

[W. Barrett Munn]

Hi, Grace.

Just so you'll know, this site doesn't recognize the EM dash and replaces it with a question mark.
The only replacement that words is: space hyphen space, like - this.

[Grace Lee]

ohh thanks a dozen
i appreciate