Shadows Hide on Brightest Day

This was a product of me completing my biology exam two hours before I could turn it in.

Shadows hide on brightest day,

In the trees, on branch they lay.

Beams shine down and kiss the land,

Yet in secret, shadows stand.

 

Dodging, hiding from plain view,

Venture out when time is due.

Upon the ground, behind a bush,

Fleeing if too hard you push.

 

Some men stay in sunbeams bright.

Others wish to shun the light.

Here is something find you may,

Where shadows hide on brightest day.

Author's Note

Please comment what you think of it.

Reviews

[Shahrier]

that was really good. you use some vivid imagery and have really good diction. and i also love how things rhyme. (im a fan of rhyming poems). this was very nice. i have nothing negative to say. but, if you did a*s two more lines on a new stanza at the end, it would be a pretty nifty sonnet.

[Gracie G]

Hm sonnet, I did not think of that! This was one of my first poems I've rhymed so I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review!

[Shahrier]

its the only poem of your i have read so far, i have a big school assignment due tomorrow and not that much time on my hand today, ^_^

[Gracie G]

Ah yes, I'm in the midst of midterms, totally understand. Good luck!

[Shahrier]

thanks. you too.

[Nancy Martin]

very well written. I enjoyed the flow and the images you brought to mind.

[Gracie G]

Thank you very much!

[Tobias Rasmussen]

It is a very good poem I really like it alot. The way you picture the land is good and not something you see very often. Nicely done.

[Gracie G]

Thank you!

[Rita L. Sev]

This has a great rhythm and superb rhyme, Gracie. A lyrical piece of nature imagery. Very nicely done!

[Gracie G]

Thanks so much!

[Gedalya]

I'm glad someone else has a taste for whimsy.

[Brenden Taylor]

Very reminiscent of Emily Dickinson in style, nature imagery, and the theme of duality.

But I feel like it's just an introduction - like the opening credits or title cards - to something much bigger.

80, and let us get on that something much bigger.

[Nusquam Esse]

I like the way you dealt with something everyone is familiar with, but so few write about. This had good flow, and while simplistic, the rhymes were great. Definitely a keeper.

[Gracie G]

Thanks so much!