Dogspeak

Dogspeak -

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A multi national consortium

of Christians,

Catholics,

Muslims, Buddhists bended

on broken knees

and straw mats

praying for

silent acknowledgement

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the broken alcoholics

on wine stained

knees

conversing with the same

Section !

lock this f****r away,

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     - harsh language -

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sending Atheists to the

house of god

force fed psalms of grace

and favour

aid the family

what use the family - less

in an uncaring world

where mercy reigns not

your prophet preaches

your ignorance resides

compassion elsewhere,

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If your Christ came knocking

would you turn your head

   ( averted eyes )

and leave him helpless

with blood red tears scalding his

tender ragged heart

in confusion at the loss of

message, of man, 

forsaken again

a tramp to the wind

and the cross, 

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at the corner of the church

of the unwashed a tattered man

suit threads falling like sin

preaches from the gutter from the 

stained remains of fast food 

desire and shame, the message

lost in language in  madness

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 in Life as we know it,

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lock this f****r away,

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm not following every twist & turn, but I love your scalding commentary, exemplified by your depiction of Jesus being befuddled by how horribly his simple message of love has been twisted, most often by those who purport to be spreading his word. I love how you bring all the religions into this, so that even as you use this brilliant "Jesus" scenario, I read your message in its entirety as being similar for whatever deity one worships (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[gram linski]

hey, Margie, aye you are right, it's that loss of message from all religions, which is basically the same f*****g message under all the s**t, but what if, what if, that was Buddha trying to ask for a buck, the same as being given a bowl of rice, think on, haha, wink wink,

[Eilis]

The brilliant thing about the prophets is that they don't abandon their cause when the rest of us twist the message into something it was never meant to be. What I like about your poem is that it gets to the heart of how we abandon compassion in the race to maintain supremacy in religion. How much evil has been done in the name of good. If a group of people has to be beaten and oppressed to make them believe in a god (or even one person), chances are the connection to deities will be superficial and fear driven.

When humans finally grow to understand this, maybe the world will experience something like peace. But, the more likely scenario is that we will just bury ourselves with our callousness and carelessness and the peace that finally reigns on earth will be human free.

You're always great at these kinds of poems, Gram. The depth of feeling that you imbue the words with and the sense of history streaming through. Christ said we should love one another. And your poem stands as a great reminder of the simplicity of that message for me. The complexity of religion being something of our own creation. And another tool misused for the purpose of power. Great poetry.

[gram linski]

hey, Eilis, aye you are right about the loss of message and corruption, you only have to look around, to see the evidence, it's a very simple idea, ;treat others as you would like to be treated, kinda negates all bad vibes, thanks as always for your time and great insight, i always appreciate your views on my poems, take care over there,

[Paul Bell]

Now, if all those great religions were in the same room and I then walked in, proclaiming I hated religion, I just bet I would be the leper in the room.

[gram linski]

aye,, but by their very nature, they would have to care for you and feed you, haha, joke's on them cheers for the read, Paul

[Paul Bell]

I'm in. lol

[Gee]

Tis all bollocks unless you belueve it, and if you do, well more fool you.
Hope all is well with you Gram

[gram linski]

as the great philosopher Mr Billy Connelly once said ; may your god go with you, but not to the toilets,

[Gee]

Ahhh, now there is a man to listen and laugh along with

[gram linski]

he then did big shitting scene whilst talking to god, haha, I'm grand , how are things down there,

[Gee]

All good here thanks

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Jeesus Gram you write the most brilliant bollocks. My sort of invective, my sort of abrasive, sarcastic, ascorbic, acidic, critical diatribe. Manful and bitter and definately food for the butcher.

[gram linski]

thanks for reading, John, aye food for the butcher's dug, lol, but what if ? what if, John, there's a thought to entertain yer brain take care down there,