Final...?

seeing you tonight made my chest ache..

remember thinking about thanksgiving?

if not, I do.. I remember the fact that

you some how calmed down my heart.

And tonight, as you sung of being some

wolf, with your vamperic tendencies

I only wanted to explain just how

wrong you are about that.

How do I explain that in your

absence, I’ve found myself in

more danger than with you here by my side.

 

All night all I wanted to do was reach out,

let you know that you’re worth everything

you think you’re not and reassure you that,

yes – people care. I care.

And worry

and fret and  

keep my fingers crossed

that you’re making it through each night.

 

And I couldn’t help but realize, that

in your thrift store jacket, tight jeans,

and the mohawk you said you’d cut,

even if we hadn’t met before

tonight I would have noticed you.

Somehow we’re magnetized,

and I’m sure you were unaware,

but everything in me

is drawn to you.

 

 

But instead, to fight off all the

feelings I still have left,

I throw myself to the person

you said to avoid. I am not one

to play with jealousy, but maybe this

will cut it? Because I am at the end

of a very short line.

I haven’t felt anything in weeks,

everything’s gone numb, except for

blocks of loneliness that can

bring me to my knees.

What do you expect me to do?

Because I am drowning here alone,

and if I’m preparing to tap out

of this game, why not do it with a bang?

 

Reviews

[kaycee]

But instead, to fight off all the
feelings I still have left,
I throw myself to the person
you said to avoid. I am not one
to play with jealousy, but maybe this
will cut it? Because I am at the end
of a very short line.

so strangely similar to my own situation and so well written about.
i'm still waiting to be disappointed by your poetry! seems unlikely...

[San Herman Lopez a.k.a...]

"But instead, to fight off all the
feelings I still have left,
I throw myself to the person
you said to avoid. I am not one
to play with jealousy, but maybe this
will cut it? Because I am at the end
of a very short line."

I could relate to this... Over all a very nice piece.

[Pink Poison]

This poem seems like it has 2 parts. The first, as sort of thoughtful self evaluation and the second a confession of sorts. The last stanza is extremely powerful and sad. I love the lines:

Because I am at the end

"...of a very short line.
I haven't felt anything in weeks,
everything's gone numb, except for
blocks of loneliness that can
bring me to my knees."

Another great poem, Rachel...of course I never expect less from you.

[Aaron B.]

and if I'm preparing to tap out

of this game, why not do it with a bang?

I LOVE THOSE LINES!!

AWESOME!

this is my new fav of yours :]