Amen

hope this prayer of mine gets heard ..

I am so lonesome , i could just die

putting an end to all my hue and cry .

Everything around me seems to be a bane

guess that's what's driving me insane .

Life has now become a burden , relieve me of this pain

let my rotten blood ooze out and flow into the drain ...

Author's Note

something that i had penned on a lonely cold night .. the words just came out

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

I think this one of your best poems..it is very well written,just with the required words and the emotion is nicely expressed through your words,the emotion with which you have written this is the hero here..cause it is so sharp and so cold and chilly..that i could feel it here..

[Iota]

I also love the last line of this one it really drives home the pain since the blood is rotten like bad oil in a car. One can only hope that this prayer was answered.

[Elizabeth]

I'm thinking you meant "that's" on the fourth line?...
"let my rotten blood ooze out and flow into the drain ..." Fantastic image! That took me down a dark road that I was loathe to go down... I loved this.

[OkieWonKenokie]

Good job. I haven't read many of your poems but this one is really good. So much emotion put into the words.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

your poetic takes the wounds quite well and reshapes them into a inky lullaby in the darkest pockets of a human curled in tears~