Death

wishing for my early demise ....

how long before this mortal body of mine gives in
relieving me of the echoes of this constant din.

every night as i go to sleep
my soul gives a silent cry cause it just cant weep.

the past is a constant reminder of the sins i have done
kindly hand me over a fully loaded gun

torn into pieces, i have already broken down
i don't give a s**t when you all look at me and frown.

drugs and cigarettes aren't doing any good
i would have changed if i could.
 
yeah bring it on, quick and fast
render me a deadly blow that won't let me for long last.

slowly but steadily i am drifting along
the Satan is hypnotizing me with his mellifluous song.

let this night my final moment come by
i am ready to walk up to the guillotine and die ...

Author's Note

i was high while penning this down .. so kindly don't mind minute errors (if there are any)

Reviews

[JENY]

You have the caliber to become a professor in English….
As I go through your poems….
I can see that …..you cant stop talking about the same theme….
You collect a handful of apt words…
And paint your feelings with them…..in a touching manner….
Then you collect…another set of words…..and depict the same feelings………very beautifully….
And so on….
Hey man cant you try…some other emotions….
Other that these……..
Add spice to your creative endeavors…..

[clauds294]

This is a powerful poem, feeling like that sometimes myself. Interesting way how you came up and having such a precise outcome. Nice work.

[Ruth]

I love the final lines, accepting of the fact that death has been placed over the heart, so what is real death!? lol
Wonderful poem!
xx

[*** Hey Jude***]

I am feeling the sorrow you have penned so well, and pray that you find the peace and love you deserve and seek.! ~ J.M.
PS I also feel death would be a release for the one I love

[Nickole Alhoni Ra'Nae]

Great rhyme scheme! This is pretty bad a*s for you to have been high. Great write!

kabhi aise mout na aaye
sseriously u are superb man

[Randy`s Princess]

good on you for being high while writing this it`s great see what an altered mind state can produce well done :)

[R.S. Wilder]

High on WHAT???????????????????

[deeps]

This is amazing!
I like this alot, wonderful flow and rhyme scheme

[DeadToTheWorld]

this was great :) truly awesome I always love reading your writeing :) keep up the good work