Morning rhyme

i had heard the first stanza somewhere and that's what inspired me to pen this down..

On the count of one
open your eyes gently to Mr. Sun !

On the count of two
awaken to view the diffused sky blue.

On the count of three
get up to sip the steaming bed tea.

On the count of four
savor the buoyancy of happiness galore.

On the count of five
rouse to shake a leg and jive.

On the count of six
bid adieu to the slumber that's keeping you transfixed.

On the count of seven
come alive to the divine music from Heaven.

Author's Note

i stopped 'on the count of seven' cause it seemed to be perfectly in sync with the seven days of the week :)

Reviews

[Cynthia]

You are right!
Stopping on the numble 7 will be what a choose if I write this too! I think this will make the poem more realistic, understand what I mean?
The Photo you choose is so beautiful!
The last line of your poem, 'come alive to the divine music from Heaven.' is one of my favourite in this poem!
Great Job!

ye poem sahi me kids k liye hai :)

[freelancejouster]

this is so quaint and darling! it reads like a beloved nursery rhyme.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think you did a really nice job on this. It kind of reminds me of a child's rhyme. I love this though. It was really cute. I liked how you pertained it to only the days of the week. That was really creative. Thanks for sharing.

[JENY]

A cute little poem….
Loved it….
Yaaaaaaaar…
Actually…where are you..???
Miss you….

[dovetailer]

I find this poem reminds me to find something in every day worth writing about...worth appreciating...finding a reason each day to live and strive for tomorrow...after all, our life is a series of consecutive days...like rungs of a ladder...from beginning to end...and every one counted...
simple but effective expression of Truth...

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the last line of this poem. I'm not a morning person but this poem is beautiful. This is how the night time hours are for me. I feel more alive at night. Great unique write.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Very genuine, I liked it a lot! :)

[Ruth]

Seven's a good number :)
This is a great poem too, really lovely to read!
Nice flow too love xx

[Lydia Blackwell]

i love the number 7 and it was a perfect way to end it. It made me think of how I like to get in my car in the morning to listen to my music!! Best part of the day.