hopless love

 

He left her alone
under the rain
when he promised
to make spring her days
no clouds, no rain
but he left her alone
under the rain

he told her your smile
will never fade
your eyes won't cry as long as i live
but he left her alone
with bleeding heart
and a bitter soul

he told her the sun is yours
your days will be sunny glow
but he left her in the dark alone
with no stars or even a moon

he told her i'll always hold your hand
i'll never let you go
or feel bad
but he dropped her hand
and walk away
he left her in the
middle of the road
alone...
with no light
no hope....

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

A very nice , well written poem.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_*

[Sami Khalil]

hahaha...

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[}Echo{]

You can really feel emotion in this write. Nice. :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:) thanks

[}Echo{]

:)

[Lexi]

The feelings between the two people in the poem are harsh, but the emotions really got to me and it is sad when I kept reading, He left her alone.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

yes he did , they always do :(

[rnuff]

really like the last stanza, I can feel the emotions thorugh out this write.
very nicely written, love the imagery.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you :) so so much

[twitter]

I like the rain without clouds and then you break the promise directly nice

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you ^_^

[Deron Alexis]

the promises a man makes... very well captured breaking the promises and doing the opposite very well illustrated well done

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thanks, most men do that unfortunately , they make all these promises and just walk a way !

[Deron Alexis]

not most there are many of us who keep the promises important enough to give to that one special lady

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

yeah but show me where they are?
i can't find any ! :(

[Deron Alexis]

come to the Caribbean we have lots of those XD

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

hhhhhhhhhhh LOL
god! its far away hhhhhhh

[Deron Alexis]

lol yeah where do I find girls who don't ignore good guys

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

hhhhhhhhh here in Jordan , far a way too :)

[Deron Alexis]

lol thanks i'll check it out some day

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

yeah , maybe who knows :)