Please God

Please God

Hear me, shout quietly to the heaven

      make me, think grandly of the possibility

hurt me, not till you bleed to the last drop

      do me, tenderly in the open space of your heart

Reviews

[ba_mcfarlane]

I am a fool for cadence. Do that, keep it simple(which is really hard to do) jeez you can write rings around any topic you take on...just a thought.
I'll leave it at I like your stuff bigtime. Pure almost raw, and cadence cadence cadence. I detest poetry that sounds like it should be in a flower seed catalogue, or come with a sacchrine warning.
Bravo!

[Marie]

A prayer and plea together...also a love poem.

[closed..acct]

I like this sounds like a plea to me or a prayer.
Nicely done!

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

This sounds like a prayer! I like it when people speak to God.

Perhaps your forte will be this as a writer, who knows!

When I used to pray to Mother Kali, I often used to swear things like this.