A BITTERSWEET SYMPHONY

"A BITTERSWEET SYMPHONY" 

Broken strings, 

Missed notes, 

Everything seems out of tune. 

She continues to play the melancholic melody of the past. 

Her songs depict infinite sadness... 

Caused by the tragic death of her one true love. 

She's holding on to what she calls a bittersweet symphony. 

But I wish she'd let go soon. 

I wish...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of words. The strong description brought to life song, struggle and the bittersweet symphony of love. I could add a epic poem from your words here. You are a talented writer. I believe we need good words to make us write. I appreciate your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[hanir]

Thank you for always giving wonderful constructive reviews! Its of great help for me.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Poetic champion composi..]

that's life................

[terry smith]

only when you can quiet the mind can the heart heal...nice poem,I know the pain you speak of.

[hanir]

Yeah..that excruciating pain!!! Whew!
Thanks for reading...

[terry smith]

...the weight that sucks the air out of your lungs and slows your blood...yes I know of that.

[hanir]

So how did you deal with it?

[terry smith]

just kept on living, eventually the things you love to do will give you some comfort, then you meet someone new, not the same andyou must except the difference and feel their love and know if they are not the one for tomorrow, they can be the one for today.

[Legion]

Melancholic. Such sadness and longing. Had a piece I was going to write similar to this of a woman who lost her husband who was a pianist. She could still hear him play every night. Turned into something else and I titled it "Blood in the Key of a Jealous C". Took a different turn indeed. Love your piece though.

[hanir]

Oh..sounds interesting. Would love to read it!

[Michael G Jameson]

I enjoyed the read, Well Done, Looking forward to reading more from you and I will, gladly 8-)

[hanir]

So glad to hear that! Thanks for taking time to read. I appreciate it.

[PANDORA]

First, the title is great as well as the last two lines which paints a picture of personal longing. This makes a very vivid write to me that pulls on.."broken strings"..my heartstrings. That is not a suggestion of change but what you made me feel.

I do have one suggestion:

melancholic melody--this tripped up the flow for me a little.

maybe..

inconsolable melody of the past

Hope this helps. I look forward to reading more!

[hanir]

Thank you for taking time to read and to give a constructive review on my piece. I used the word melancholic because I think it would best describe the past melody which was full of sadness and depression. Although, "inconsolable" would be pretty fine too! 😊 Well, I'm still a neophyte in this. I wasn't born to write but I would like to grow somehow. 😁 I would be pleased if you could review some more of my works. 😊

[PANDORA]

I'm glad I could help and yes, i will read and review more. :-)

[JulianaSun]

Another poem about loss...A bittersweet symphony - love is like that, bitter and sweet at the same time. But a love lost to death is a true tragedy which you have managed to captured so perfectly with your words.

[hanir]

A very tragic death because the person isn't actually dead in flesh...

[JulianaSun]

A dead soul is sometimes more painful to watch than a dead person, weird as it may sound.

[hanir]

Exactly! The pain seems eternal! 😭

[Saruwa]

Very deep. Thanks for sharing. Agreed ^^ A death of a relationship or someones soul is much more painful