The Waves.

An ode to someone who caused this feeling...

The current has subdued from its tireless reign;

The foam settled and the roar silenced.

I am no longer caught in the endless white squall-

Heaving, begging, enduring.

I stand on the shore, my feet planted in sand;

I am steady, balanced.

The water still tries to pull me in and carry me back,

To the blue and the white and the black-

The infinite black.

But I am safe here, I am untouchable.

In the distance I still see the uneven horizon,

As the tyrant lurks beneath the surface,

Breaking the sheer veil of serene beauty,

With its demand for domination, for destruction.

I know the waters will rise again;

The sand will wash away,

And I will have to stand on my own,

But this time I can see them,

I know how they form and crash and build;

I know how to break free from the grip,

How to swim away and keep breathing.

This time I will not be drowned by them-

The waves.

Reviews

[Emrick]

Lovely title.The ocean "world" will never be a safe place.Every wave that rises tries to out do the other.Some end calmly on the sea shores but others end with a huge destruction. It needs wisdom to understand how they form and build and how to break free from them.

[Hannah]

Thank you, you're very wise :)

[Latifa]

I know how they form and crash and build;
I know how to break free from the grip,
How to swim away and keep breathing.
This time I will not be drowned by them-
The waves.
i liked the closing much

[Hannah]

Thank you :)

[Chris]

A nice dedication. Good symbolism and descriptiveness.

[Hannah]

Thank you, I really appreciate your feedback :)

[Sami Khalil]

Life has waves that comes and goes , the ups and downs , the calm times and the raging ones . We need to learn to ride the storms and have the strength to endure...A splendid poem...:)

[Hannah]

You interpreted that beautifully, that's exactly how I saw it in my mind... thank you very much :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I must be a psychic...lol
You are welcome...:)

[Aethereal]

I enjoyed how you beautifully depicted with great imagery a complex emotional struggle through a powerful natural metaphor. I feel the power of the waves here. A powerful force may be mastered through a knowledge of its characteristics be it natural or emotional.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much... I found that pain has a wave-like tendency... One moment the waters are calm and still and the next, they're crashing down on you and you find it hard to breathe... And once I realised that, it was much easier for me to find a way to master it :)

[zainul]

I congratulate you for standing against the tyrant.
I appreciate you for mustering courage.
Love these lines:
"But I am safe here, I am untouchable.
In the distance I still see the uneven horizon,
As the tyrant lurks beneath the surface,
Breaking the sheer veil of serene beauty,
With its demand for domination, for destruction."

[Hannah]

Thank you so much, I wanted to emphasise the obstacles we face on our journey to finding new strength... I love hearing what stood out to people :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
Your poem may be an inspiration for many others.:)

[Horizons]

Nice.... A lovely poem, ending was great and some lines made an impact on me. I loved the piece with the real words, with the waves you made. What the turns of rivers or an ocean do when we stand in the on an edge of the line you dropped everything. What the winds do, blow the hair and put me into an other world you dig it. I loved it especially your last lines that touched me. Nice flow of ink.

[Hannah]

I love how it made you feel, it's such an accomplishment for me to read that... Thank you :)

[Vidushi Sharma]

This draws you so much in, that i happen to relate it with reality of life!!
i found it inspiring!

[Hannah]

Thank you! I'm glad you were able to relate... I hope to do that with all my writing :)

[Allen Smuckler]

I just arrived home from a Tai Chi class...and the first six lines or so...brought me back
Creative use of metaphors throughout the write, Hannah ... spot on if you will
with colorful, vivid images to describe and enhance the mood.
Great thing about waves is that for every ebb... there is a flow...
Well done Hannah
allen

[Hannah]

Your feedback means a lot to me, thank you very much :)

[Allen Smuckler]

welcome, Hannah