Marmalade Vodka

suffering the after effects of my parents wedding day

Vodka bruised brain

attempts to break free

from the confines of my skull,

pulsating with alien- like intensity.

Oh to have a fine- bored drill

that I might relieve the pressure,

and quell the nauseating

rise and fall

accompanying every motion.

If only the clock

would reverse its' hands

that I might have the wisdom

to decline the offered glass,

and knowingly resist the allure

of this demonic

marmalade drink.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I must say that Marmalade Vodka sounds like quite an interesting drink. Although, you have shown very well what the hangover is like. The first four lines were my favorite. I also liked how your second stanza presented that jump in time. That was a nice touch.

[New Dawn]

Thank you. yes an experience I will not be repeating believe me :)

[Clockwork]

You are welcome. I can imagine :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see this also as a metaphor...there are things we do or partake in that seem like a good idea at the time...but often come back to bite us later...in some form or another.

there is always allure in that which might be bad for us...for instance a relationship...

one little correction: "if only the clock would reverse its hands"

but nice wording in this...

and you took something as simple as a hangover, and gave it other possibilities.

jacob

[New Dawn]

Thank you Jacob - and correction noted - that is why you are the teacher and I am not. Yes it is easy to be inticed by things we should leave alone, i won't be partaking of this particular vice for a while.

[quinfinn]

never thought i would see a hangover put into prose, but there it is...in its glory. you have described nicely (or not so nicely) the hell of the morning after ....well done.

[New Dawn]

Not just the morning after but the entire day - obviously i'm getting a little old for such behavoir :)

[Frieda P]

haha been there, done that. Nicely said.

[New Dawn]

Thank you so much, Have been there myself before but not for a while - had forgotton quite how bad it could be :)

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~ hahahaha... ~ but if you had declined it, i wouldn't have read the best hang-over poem ever written by anyone... ~ i'm especially proud that it's not written by a boy-man but is written by one of the cutest girl-women ever... :P

[New Dawn]

thanks Serah - it's the last time I ever let my brother - in - law fix me one of his cocktails. feeling ever so slightly more human today:)

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~ haha... well, it was a super exceptional situation so i humbly plead with you to forgive him... :P ~ and, welcome back to the human world... you are so cute... i love how you expressed how you're feelin' a bit better... :)