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Im really bad at titles^

Insecurities are slowly becoming my best friend Sometime I can't help but think maybe it's time for the end I try to snap myself out of it because I don't like thinking this way But then I fall back into it, hearing the words people say They must not understand that their words mean more than they think The fact that I rely on their opinion completely and utterly stinks! I try to block them out and tell myself I'm fine But in the end it doesn't work because I know it's just a lie. Maybe someday I'll forget about society and focus on loving me For now I'll continue being drowned by the people I call 'them' I feel like a flower that's beig withered With leaves slowly falling from my stem.

Author's Note

I think the last stanza Is a little rough. Suggestions and friendly criizism is encouraged!:)

Reviews

[Asya]

I loved the last stanza! Great job! ;)

[Mir]

Thank you for reviewing! :)

[h cingisiz]

I'm no expert (need to make that very clear :) and maybe because you already mentioned the last stanza, but I do agree, someone else I know who is a poet (I'm not btw) told me once that a poem needs to stick to a theme including symbolism all the way through, so maybe because you used the flower as a simile of your feelings (which is a great line in it's own right) it stands apart from the rest of the poem as there is no other reference to flowers/leaves etc (hope that makes sense)

Oh and the title is great I think, and your description made me giggle!

[Mir]

Thank you for your kind review:) And I 100% agree with you! I've been trying to come up with a way to change that. Maybe I'll use the reviewer below's way of saying it. I didn't do that already because I feel like I should come up with it on my own. Anyways...Thank you very much! :)

[NaugleB]

"Maybe someday I'll forget sociecty and focus on loving me, maybe someday I'll put a smile on and life will be cheery. But for now I'm drowned by the poeple i call "them" like a flower, withered, leaves falling from my stem"

I dont know much about poetry forms or specific types this is just an example of what I thought would sound nice.

[NaugleB]

But a very good piece of writing indeed. I love to see poeple write about there inner most thoughts and feelings. It is very inspiring

[NaugleB]

**thier

[Mir]

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! :) And I like the way you worded it! Possibly going to change it:) And I'm so glad you liked it! I only write decent work when I actually feel something. Any other writing you can tell if I had actuall emotions put into it or if they were just generic. Thanks again!

[The Invisible Girl]

Wow,this is really good. A great emotional poem! 100/100 Keep it up!
P.S the last stanza was my favorite!!

[Mir]

Thank you so so much! :) and the last stanza was probably the one I like the least so that means a lot!

[The Invisible Girl]

Your welcome! :)