Jolted

So there's a guy that is really creeping me out.

Sitting:

I feel your eyes on me.

Burning a hole in my back. 

Walking;

You follow.

Glance back;

You're staring.

Your gaze is penetrating. 

I walk faster.

You match my pace. 

My breathing increases. 

I start to run.

Panting;

You run after me. 

Chasing me.

Glaring at me

Reaching for me. 

I sprint. 

You sprint. 

I hide;

Trying to catch my breath. 

Alert.

Ready to move. 

I start to relax. 

1...

2...

3...

4.

Suddenly you're there. 

Staring down at me. 

Eyes making me cower. 

Reaching for me.

 

I scream. 

And jolt awake .

Author's Note

I don't even know what to say about this one. Honest opinions please!

Reviews

[devon]

You are really, really great at giving off certain moods or emotions in your poetry. The shortness of each individual line and each stanza gives off a feeling of urgency or a hastened mood. You could feel the narrator's desire to get away, and the fear building up. The title goes along very well with the poem, as well!

I think you did an excellent job! :)

[Mir]

Why Thank you! :) ya, I thought Jolted, kind of made sense haha. I'm glad you liked it! :)

[devon]

You're welcome! And it makes a lot of sense!

[Miranda Richard]

Was this a dream? Poems wise it doesn't rhyme and that bothers me. Yet, not rhyming gives it such raw emotion! I love "I feel your eyes on me. Burning a hole in my back."

[Mir]

The guy is real, but yes, this was a dream, a nightmare, really.
thank you for your review! :)

[Miranda Richard]

Anytime ;)