Hourglass

It starts with a single grain,          

Contemplating where to take everything,

Seemingly hesitating to keep moving.

 Will the situation keep improving?

 

Diluting all we comprehend,

We are just waiting for it to be finished.

Somehow it’s a reason to why we sinned.

An object appearing so reserved,

Has man in a choke hold.

 

So we keep questioning,

Keep obsessing,

Keep addressing its ending,

Wishing it would start answering.

 

Seemingly it hesitated.

I answered what I questioned.

An hourglass is empowered,

Because man is fascinated.

 

Time is controlling,

All we are doing!

Why so we keep contesting, 

When there is no wining?

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Ah, time! You can't hold it, but you can sure lose it!

[Poison Ivy]

i agree, very powerful. genius writing!

[Felicity's Eve]

Powerful, elegant, and amazing as always. ;)

[Ees]

Wonderful way to portray the thoughts and continuous question of man and the interplay between man and time. It is an obsession. It's a concept that we wish we could fight.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. Fantastic work

[Steven]

Nice write buddy. Full of thought provoking philosophy regarding matters of time.

So we keep questioning,
Keep obsessing,
Keep addressing its ending,
Wishing it would start answering.

Yes, we do! But the blind Rhino keeps marching forward, ignoring. Good stuff here. The only polishing I could see is in that second stanza. Seems a little wordy, oversized. I might just omit "We are just waiting for it to be finished." Otherwise, loved it.

[J. Viands]

Yeah I could see that thanks for the review

[James William Dyer]

I like the way this one read out loud. Nice subject matter, too. It'd be neat to pattern the words out so the poem made the shape of an hour glass.

[J. Viands]

Yeah figured you would say that I have been thinkin bout it after readin your stuff

[James William Dyer]

LOL, I think it's appropriate here, could add to the poem. Great poem, by the way.

[J. Viands]

thanks

[Michael of Gilead]

"This thing all things devours:

Birds, beasts, trees, flowers;

Gnaws iron, bites steel;

Grinds hard stones to meal;

Slays kings, ruins towns,

And beats high mountain down."

[Ruth]

Time is indeed a tyrant to many!
I like your descriptive quality love...
That hourglass, when reflected on, causes myriad emotion xox

[Caitlynn Cusick]

Great write... Intense quiestions, powerful imagery, and it leaves u questioning ur whole meaning.... Positively great!!!!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Very well done! Makes you think and question and it flows nicely. Great job