Beats & Butterflies

I love you He whispers in her ear.

She merely laughs,

did you expect her to say it back?

Her heart couldn't give you that satisfaction,

it's cold & still like an ice block.

Without beats & butterflies,

all those lovely things have gone bye-bye.

 

Author's Note

Thoughts? Opinions?

Reviews

[MattWheatus]

Ice queen! lol! Cool, calm in control but I don't envy someone in her situation. It's really interesting to see a poem break out the normal 'love poem' mode and head the opposite route and your line "without beats and butterflies" is powerful and a really well chosen title!

[Alexa Aiden]

This is great! Her laughing at his I love you; sad and honest. Wonderful.

[Lucia]

This is really amazing. It's childish and mature at the same time. How did you do that! lol Short, yet descriptive. Loved it! Keeping writing like this.

[VioletRose]

It is short and again to the point! VERY well!

[r]

wow.... i know the feeling of this.... tis a great poem... nice work

[victoria]

oh wow! this is so powerful and so unike anything ive read before. it reminds me of a time when i had a hard time telling my boyfriend i loved him back. but this was a great read, i loved it :)

[MusicJunkie66]

I loved how you summed the main points up using just 7 sentences.
awesome job! =)

[Casper Cross]

Thankfully this has never happened me...
Nice work on all the poems you sent me. You are very gifted.

[Tracie Skarbo]

Oh how sad that she is not ready to say the words... it doesn't mean she never will just that she is still hurting...I wonder if he will be strong enough to be ok with this??

[Huggy Bear]

It is a very strong stance on love

[Erin Lee]

i like this. i expected her to say it back and she didn't. i think it would be neat if u expanded on this and told us why she is so cold to the idea of love (or maybe, just to him)