The Bear

My first poem

The crisp, winter night,

Empty of Bliss

He takes a step forward,

Determined not to miss,

The sound he is searching for

But takes a sharp breath of air,

Not but a meter behind him

Stands tall, the bear.

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

This is a wonderfully written and flowing poem that is simply intruiging. I love how you have a rhyme scheme and it's very descriptive.

[Crifa]

Love it. This is amazing for your first poem. You should write more...or maybe not..you might make us all feel bad...nah keep writing:)

This is amazing, like this write alot

[Odayin]

This is really good for your first one!:) you have good descriptions and nice punctuation, especially in the last line. Can't wait for your next one;)