The awkward silence in goodbye

Even as we say goodbye

I can feel the silence churn

The voice disbelief

The notion that there is no I love you

The very purposeful leaving out of I love you

And God do I love you

So here's my shot in the dark

The words neither of us will speak

The words we feel so deeply

I love you and I miss you and I want you too be happy

Can my heart not love even though we are not one and the same?

Of course

Reviews

[Onatah]

This is how the awkward silence usually is. Thinking on the past, and what you are letting go. Thinking of what you would like to say, but can't. We can learn from the silences in our lives.

[Kejo]

Beautiful.
You said you wanted critique but the only thing I can see is that in my opinion the one line seems a little akward. Where you say "the verry purposeful leaving out of I love you". Maybee try replacing the words "leaving out of" with something like "absence of". Still overall a powerful, beautiful piece.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Poignant, very emotional, overall I liked the whole poem and enjoyed reading it, somewhat nostalgic also, or maybe it is me, well, nevertheless I find it as a marvelous writing. Excellent poem, keep up the good work.