God Gives

God made me with no eye lashes and crooked teeth, 

god gave him beautiful eyes and braces when he was ten. 

God gave me a small house with a big family, 

God gave him a big house with a small family. 

God gave me the things that i needed, 

and I swear god let him have everything. 

Except even if he did have everything he'd always asked for, he still wouldn't get me

because god never gave him a big heart and personality. 

Reviews

[GalaxyGhost]

There is a sweetness to this poem. I'm wondering about why two of the words "God" weren't capitalized. Not sure if it's supposed to be like that or not. But wonderful poem!

[Warrior]

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[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was very deep and meaningful.
I like the whole story line to this one, and the ending was very good.
Keep on writing :)