You Don't Tell Me...

Hell yeah...

Folded like the crease in gangland Chinos

Your mind dips lower than an election year politicians virtues

Creating a halo around the campsite shitter

Convincing everyone that it smells like money and sex

Pop the truth

An ugly blister

French kissing black lips, the reapers' sister

Pull the lie

Expose the muscle

Running the most elaborate hustle

You choose what you write.....

Mending the fence when the course gets too heavy

Drinking your coffee from old poets cups, cowboy style

And spitting out volumes that fall on sensitive ears

Riding shotgun in the onyx beast, you weaping Chivas

Cap the punk

Wear his hat sideways

Etching out grooves on life's shadowed highways

Pinch the ducket

Grating the raw nerve

Throwing the masses a down and out curve

You don't tell me, I tell you.....

Author's Note

You write what you want...just sayin'...

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

Its interesting that an ex pat Englishman who considers himself now a Scot can get so much out of this. It has lines that I will remember for a long time and already wish I had written myself.. You have invented a new style. Lets call it Excellent anger.

[kentuck14]

C,
There are some great lines in this piece . . . "gangland chinos", the "halo", "drinking coffee from old poet's cups, cowboy style." There must have been some of those magic mushrooms ingested around that campfire!!!! I'm assuming this poem is about another poet whose work is in Italics?! Maybe this was a 'scream' of consciousness!!!???
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[Kenneth The Poet]

You write you want for sure, but you have to ask yourself, did you write it and know it would be excellent or not? I find this work to be strange, off-beat yet excellent. It's terse, blunt and uncompromising. I love the line about drinking from the cups of old writers, which reminds me of how we probably base our own works on how past writers have written. Overall, you scored a hit. Nice work here.

[Crowley]

Hey thanks for the awesome review. There used to be a poet on here named EH Monroe and he was the king of writing exactly what he though, no matter how others took it. This was a tribute to him and his awesome attitude toward writing. Thanks again for reading.

[Crowley]

Oh, and as for the question about if I knew it would be excellent. I don’t think that way. I always hope it will just hit a chord with someone.

[Kenneth The Poet]

You definitely hit one with me. Thank you for doing that.

[Crowley]

It’s more my pleasure than yours, but anytime!

[Robert Trakofler]

Hell F*****G yeah Crowley! My 4 year old granddaughter gives face just like that pick:) I feel like this was an argument with yourself and somebody just happened to be in the way during the throws. But the anger in it is palpable and clear and the message is golden! And hell f*****g yeah your right brother

[Crowley]

Check my answer to the review above. It’s always nice to see people who write whatever they want. It comes out more honest. This was a tribute piece.

[Robert Trakofler]

I'm afraid I have that horrible blue blood training that makes me edit everything I say "if you cant say anything nice don't say anything at all" I must of heard this a thousand times from my mother and then I got this Dad who was a guttersnipe saying "f**k um" somewhere between these to forces of nature spawned a very confused rabbit! But I am learning to be more honest and leaving the gentlemens genocide out of my equation:0 But I still say Hell f*****g yeah to the poem

[Crowley]

Thanks man. I am the same way, just deleted a poem two days ago cuz I didn’t think it was appropriate.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

P.s. Ill always tell ya...Im just down like that!lol

[Crowley]

I would expect nothing less...thanks Q!!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Well...I think you say it better and braver than me...but who am I to say...the pennies on the list tell me I hurt them with my words :)