Crushed

I am not bitter...you take that back!!!!

Your words cut the feet out from under

The rickety pedestal, built haphazardly

From recycled lumber and twice used nails

But still, I will endeavor to sing

Genuinely and in staggard octaves, searching

For a tune that placates your sense of what should be

Author's Note

We have all been there...I think...wait, am I alone in this? Man I suck.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I've been bypassing the listings by you in my reading library this week, knowing you are out adventuring & not wanting to pile on your "to-do" list upon returning to the cafe. But I figured I'd drop a little note to letcha know we are missing you . . . but take your time about getting back in the groove again. As for this poem, I loved the "leftovers" theme in construction -- great details, well-stated. But that last line was like a gut-punch after the more lighthearted rest of your message. It pains me to watch anyone twist themselves in knots for a persnickety other. Enjoying my new system with no more "hanging"!!! *smile* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Crowley]

Having a great time. Glad your new system is awesome!!! It is a bit chilly and rainy here but soaking in the culture and a different kind of island life...lol

[barleygirl]

I admire you for your adventurousness! *smile*

[Nicole]

It's amazing how we move forward, even in that moment when we're sure it's the end of our heart. It's funny (not literally) how we keep throwing ourselves out there like worms on a fish hook and how we are able to believe again and again. I loved this piece!

[Crowley]

Thank you, that's a repost from like six years ago, but I still like it as well. Its a pleasure to meet you and I look forward to reading more of your work!!!

[Nicole]

Even from six years ago, it still will ring true for someone at any given time.
Thank you, It's my pleasure as well

[CD Campbell]

I really hate that sentiment of being on the bottom of a dirt pile from a few choice words thrown out by someone we love or admire. We end up trying harder to please that same person when we should be telling the to go "f*ck" themselves. My review was not very elegant, but your poem was. I give it a thumbs up. CD

[Crowley]

Elegance is the eye of the beholder, I liked the review better than the poem...thanks so much!!!

[Neville]

Some of us are still there and my lip is so thick, I can't suck... nice ...... N

[Crowley]

Thanks Neville!!

[Neville]

pleasure well it will be when the swelling goes down...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Well, that's what I thought at first and then I read your note on top and thought...hmmm maybe I was off and yes Cee...I gotcha!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Wait...is someone really hating on you...where they at? Ill show them some lip lash! just point me in the right direction!!!!

[Crowley]

Lol. no. Not sure why, but I write a mean poem about loves defeat. Most of them are just s**t that pops in my mind. Thanks Q...I know you have my back!!!