Out of Focus

Once, on the horizon, there were trees, sunsets and mountains, now it’s a black line
It is hard to see when the only  vantage point is two feet from the tip of a nose
The dangling weight inside the chest pulling eyelids closed and aching, oh the aching
Everything is against the grain, this is not what I am, but pointing fingers remind

I would touch you but,
I would talk to you but,
I would tell you I love you but,

These tears are all I have left, and they burn
Making a postage stamp out of the big picture

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Like trying to hold running water in cupped hands... the emotion here is quite palpable and touched this reader very much. That last line leaves a lasting impression btw. Good one, C.

[Crowley]

That's a great analogy Doc!!! Thanks for the review, its great to hear from you!!!

[Chris Shaw]

Strong write here Crowley. I sense frustration and disappointment big time. All those glorious sunsets are lost in blanket cloud. Nice work my friend.

Chris

[Crowley]

Thanks Chris!!! Good to see your face!!!

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Regret was the heaviest emotion I pulled from this piece. Your opening and closing lines paint such vivid imagery... excellent writing.

[Crowley]

Thank you!!! Definitely some regret in that one!! I appreciate the review!

[lightsong]

I truly hope that this is not about You dear Crowley, You paint pain and depression in a powerful emotive and moving way I've not read before, what was there now all is gone, where the blooming future laid there is nothing but desolate desert, You talk to our hearts and pull them to and for You, brilliant how You started Your poem then made it all clear in the second verse, I would say to him though, take no "buts" and have the courage to try it again even for a last time. superb piece my friend, I wish You all the best, send You many warm blessings and Love*

[Crowley]

Thanks Light!!!! I appreciate the review and it’s good to see you!! Just been a bit of a trial lately, but it will get better!!

[lightsong]

I send You golden prayers, do take care of Yourself my friend.