The Hand of God

Hmmmmmm.....

The Hand of God

Lying face up, leaking life's experiences 

Outside the house of God

Shadows like soldiers trading bets

Bets on time of death

 

Fortune never smiled on me

Lovers never died for me

 

I see Him, lighted glory

He bends, hand on knife

No pull, just a twist

Come with me child, gently

 

-          CSR(Hail!)

Author's Note

Again...hmmmmmm

Reviews

[Karma]

Not sure if I got this right - my thoughts when reading this simple yet meaningful poem : Sad for this unfortunate person waiting for death while reflecting his/her meaningless life when God lovingly ended his/her suffering.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I was less than two...she would sit me on her lap at the piano...the sun through the front window shining on her spirit...I knew she was an angel. She lay my hands on the keys...and played ...The Rose...she died of cancer when I was 5....in a darkened hospital room ....I stood by her hospital bed holding the hand of God...

[Ms. Gruye]

benevolence is an art that is difficult to muster, especially for a deity. Interesting take on the old puritanical pilgrim, human hating God, only in personal narrative. I know this is not a new piece for you, but it certainly stands out among your finest to "grr" uerilla poems. viva la...

oh, though, I am torn on the term lifeblood...felt a little vampirish.

[Kerry O'Connor]

Hmmmm...

That's a punch to the solar plexus - no doubt.

Yet strangely satisfying...

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. holy **** !!! ... what happened here??? ... was this the final moment? ... ah, he was gentle in the end ... (but my head's still spinning) ... i've known it for a while ... your writing has that epic quality ... it resonates ... and when you write words like this ... well, the rest of us can only gape ...

[Ice QueenJen]

hmmmmm..... an interesting take on a soldiers life. Nice change for and from you!

Jen

[Ladysue]

this is very deep. The ending quite surprising. It flowed effortlessly yet makes a powerful statement. good work...

[Robin]

an extremely deep poem of social responsibilty

[Valentine]

Sad write..life is to be experienced with god also on this earth..Man cannot do it all by himself..lola nd God bless..Valentien